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Postby swiftie13 » Sun Jan 30, 2011 10:57 pm

Hello there. I just wanted to make a thread for songwriters so they can post original songs and we can see what we think of them, if you want to. I did this because I admire songwriters (many of my favorites are songwriters e.g. Taylor Swift, Ke$ha, Jason Derulo)and I like their honesty and ability to create good music with their words. The songs can be about anything you want and you can also write about why or what inspired you to write the song. I'll start. :oops: :D
Dancing In The Rain- By Me :wink:

I'm all alone
Don't know what to do
It's raining outside
Oh oh yeah
I'm trying to hide
I don't want to hurt inside
I close my eyes
And run outside

Chorus
I wanna be dancing in the rain
Feeling no pain
Being careless, just like a kid
I don't want to know anything
Just want to feel the rain on my face
The world moving at my pace, oh
Dancing in the rain
Feeling no pain

Don't want to cry
Don't want to know why
I look up at the sky
Oh oh yeah
I wanna scream
Block out the mean
Just spin around
and feel the breeze

Chorus
I wanna be dancing in the rain
Feeling no pain
Being careless, just like a kid
I don't want to know anything
Just want to feel the rain on my face
The world moving at my pace, oh
Dancing in the rain
Feeling no pain

Laughing out loud
Living the moment
Not caring, just like a kid
Just want to feel the wind on my face
The world moving at my pace
Oh, dancing in the rain
Feeling no pain

I need to breathe (2x)
Oh oh, dancing
Whoa oh, laughing
I need to breathe (2x)
Rain, rain come right now
And wash away my pains

Chorus
I wanna be dancing in the rain
Feeling no pain
Being careless, just like a kid
I don't want to know anything
Just want to feel the rain on my face
The world moving at my pace, oh
Dancing in the rain
Feeling no pain

Laughing out loud
Living the moment
Not caring, just like a kid
Just want to feel the wind on my face
The world moving at my pace
Oh, dancing in the rain
Feeling no pain

I wrote this song on April 2nd, 2010
It was a sunny April afternoon, and I was all alone,I just wanted to release my pain and dace in the rain (even though it was sunny) :D
I hope you liked it.
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Postby SOS7 » Mon Jan 31, 2011 4:40 am

That's pretty good.
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Postby ANH » Mon Jan 31, 2011 4:49 am

It's good, but you need to pick a word and repeat the hell out of it for it to be music.

i.e., "Alejandro", "Obsessed", or "Baby".

Also, try putting days of the week in there.
Maybe
"I Wanna Be Dancing in the Rain
On Monday, Tuesday, Wednesday and Thursday,
Friday, Saturday, Sunday and Monday"

It'll be a guaranteed hit. Promise.
:) Just kidding.
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Postby swiftie13 » Mon Jan 31, 2011 11:57 am

Thanks guys! :D I think it's definitely one of the best I've written. I'm glad you think it's good. (Should I put I wanna be dancing dancing dancing dancing in the rain :lol: )

Anybody else got one. I have tons of them but can anyone else post one? Only if you want to. :D :wink:
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Postby ANH » Mon Jan 31, 2011 2:44 pm

You got it!
It can be like that or "Dan Dan Dancing Dan Dan Dancing..." or "D-D-D-D-D-Dancing".

There's a song in my head that is halfway done called the "Pineapple Song".
I was thinking of sending it to some label because it's a guaranteed hit, but I don't know if I want to dominate the charts for months.
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Postby swiftie13 » Mon Jan 31, 2011 8:32 pm

ANH wrote:You got it!
It can be like that or "Dan Dan Dancing Dan Dan Dancing..." or "D-D-D-D-D-Dancing".

There's a song in my head that is halfway done called the "Pineapple Song".
I was thinking of sending it to some label because it's a guaranteed hit, but I don't know if I want to dominate the charts for months.
:D Pineapple Song :lol: Interesting title, can you post it? You don't have to, I'm just really curious. It sounds good based on the title. (Let me guess, it repeats one word over and over LOL) :wink:
I picture my song more of a country song than anything else, so if someone ever sung this song, it wouldn't become a hit, unless an electro version was made for it and it used repetition. LOL :D :roll:
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Postby swiftie13 » Tue Feb 01, 2011 10:33 pm

We should do a "Lyrics Of The Week" poll. You guys can post or PM me your candidates. They can be any lyrics. Just make sure you include all the writers names. You can also nominate any original lyrics, if anyone posts any. I started with two.

Brought Up That Way- Taylor Swift and Hyler. It's a tale of a girl named Emily, and how her daddy is always there. Taylor writes about being bullied in school, Emily almost losing her virginity, and being in a car crash with a drunk driver. It's so inspirational. Definitely one of Swift's best. It's only a demo.

Firework- Katy Perry, Mikkel S. Eriksen, Tor Erik Hermansen, Sandy Wilhelm, Ester Dean
Whoever hasn't heard this song must be deaf :wink: :lol: . It's another inspirational song and let's us shine like fireworks as we shot across the sky-y-y!
This song let me see Katy Perry as an artist not just a hit single maker.
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Postby CrazyCrazy » Wed Feb 02, 2011 1:13 pm

I'll try and write something! :D
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Postby oasisbobo » Wed Feb 02, 2011 4:32 pm

I love writing and I write all the time :D Hope you might like some of my stuff :) Here are a few of my better ones :lol:

Almost Like One
You said "We are almost like one"
It will be that way forever
We will become one
When we end up together

Money, fame, luck or happiness
What the future holds no one knows
We might never end up side by side
But that's the way it goes

Don't want to be where I can't be with you

Will fate bring us together in the end
Teady bears to hug and to hold
As long as we're happy whatever that means
Will we be together when we're grey and old

Your face is pretty and bright
Give me a wink and give me a smile
To see you smile makes me happy
Who knows where we'll be in a while

Don't want to be where I can't be with you


Change
I hated it back then
But now I want it back again
Those moments wont last forever
So cherish them while you can

If I could go back then I would
If we can climb the trees again then we should
Those moments wont last forever
So cherish them while you can

Nothings really changed but nothing seems the same

Theres not a moment I will forget
Theres not a thing I will regret
Those moments wont last forever
So cherish them while you can

Things change
People change
But some things will always be the same
Things change
People change
But some things will always be the same

Nothings really changed but nothing seems the same


Nowhere
Look outside with a different perspective
And life looks interesting
Tell me something I wanna hear
And this time make it clear

I try to close my eyes at night
But I can't seem to get any sleep
Everything is changing and it don't seem right
Please tell me it will turn out alright

And you go out on your own
With nothing else to do
And nowhere else to go

Nothing seems the same anymore
Wake up every morning feeling sore
You search for a winner
But you've ran out of luck

The place you're heading is coming fast
The place you love is the place you live
You feel tired and weak
You've got nothing left to give

And you go out on your own
With nothing else to do
And nowhere else to go
Tommy Reilly - Shut My Eyes

If we couldn't die we'd never feel alive. I need that fear it keeps me talking it wakes me up when I'm sleepwalking.
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Postby swiftie13 » Wed Feb 02, 2011 8:27 pm

oasisbobo wrote:I love writing and I write all the time :D Hope you might like some of my stuff :) Here are a few of my better ones :lol:

Almost Like One
You said "We are almost like one"
It will be that way forever
We will become one
When we end up together

Money, fame, luck or happiness
What the future holds no one knows
We might never end up side by side
But that's the way it goes

Don't want to be where I can't be with you

Will fate bring us together in the end
Teady bears to hug and to hold
As long as we're happy whatever that means
Will we be together when we're grey and old

Your face is pretty and bright
Give me a wink and give me a smile
To see you smile makes me happy
Who knows where we'll be in a while

Don't want to be where I can't be with you


Change
I hated it back then
But now I want it back again
Those moments wont last forever
So cherish them while you can

If I could go back then I would
If we can climb the trees again then we should
Those moments wont last forever
So cherish them while you can

Nothings really changed but nothing seems the same

Theres not a moment I will forget
Theres not a thing I will regret
Those moments wont last forever
So cherish them while you can

Things change
People change
But some things will always be the same
Things change
People change
But some things will always be the same

Nothings really changed but nothing seems the same


Nowhere
Look outside with a different perspective
And life looks interesting
Tell me something I wanna hear
And this time make it clear

I try to close my eyes at night
But I can't seem to get any sleep
Everything is changing and it don't seem right
Please tell me it will turn out alright

And you go out on your own
With nothing else to do
And nowhere else to go

Nothing seems the same anymore
Wake up every morning feeling sore
You search for a winner
But you've ran out of luck

The place you're heading is coming fast
The place you love is the place you live
You feel tired and weak
You've got nothing left to give

And you go out on your own
With nothing else to do
And nowhere else to go
Wow, I love those songs! You are talented! :D
My favorite is Change. It's :cry: very good. Very.
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Postby Play » Wed Feb 02, 2011 9:46 pm

Well, I'm saving them for the Songwriter Idol 2011 :D
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Postby swiftie13 » Wed Feb 02, 2011 9:56 pm

Play wrote:Well, I'm saving them for the Songwriter Idol 2011 :D
:lol: Is there really such thing?
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Postby oasisbobo » Thu Feb 03, 2011 8:26 pm

Thanks very much swiftie13, a new UKMix friend :D Thanks for the nice comments it means alot :D I'll post a few more :)
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Postby king_oxymoron » Thu Feb 03, 2011 8:36 pm

swiftie13 wrote:
Play wrote:Well, I'm saving them for the Songwriter Idol 2011 :D
:lol: Is there really such thing?
Certainly is!

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Postby CrazyCrazy » Thu Feb 03, 2011 8:55 pm

Great songs Oasisbobo! :wink:

I've never written a song before but I've written something which I think could be used a simple love pop song! :)

I Love You, it's True

Do you ever think of yourself?
What it is that you want?
Sometimes wants are just as important as your needs.

CHORUS
Keep looking into the ocean waves
It'll all become clear one day
I'm sure you'll be happy
I'm sure you'll be happy

You chameleon you, I've seen what you do
You have the world on a platter
You can go as far as you want to go
Keep twisting & grooving, it's the only way

CHORUS
Keep looking to the blue blue sky
It'll all become clear one day
I'm sure you'll be happy
I'm sure you'll be happy

If only you knew, how my heart thuds for you
I guess I'll just hibernate my love
One day you'll see, love has been here all along living in me.
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Postby oasisbobo » Thu Feb 03, 2011 8:58 pm

crazycrazy wrote:Great songs Oasisbobo! :wink:
Thanks :) Your song is pretty nice and I agree with you :) I love the name and the ending :)
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Postby CrazyCrazy » Thu Feb 03, 2011 9:01 pm

oasisbobo wrote:
crazycrazy wrote:Great songs Oasisbobo! :wink:
Thanks :) Your song is pretty nice and I agree with you :) I love the name and the ending :)
Thank you very much! I do write stories but not songs it felt quite good to do it! :D
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Postby oasisbobo » Thu Feb 03, 2011 9:04 pm

I think im gonna love this thread :D :D Here are some more of mine :) Hope you enjoy :)

Dance In The Snow
It's that time of year
When all the roads are clear
It's that time of night
When there's nothing but the moon in sight

The stars light up the sky
Holding on to each other
We're not letting go
We can dance in the snow

It's the end of the night
But if you dont go
We can dance in the snow
Untill the morning light

Lying in the snow looking up at the sky
Holding hands looking up at the stars
If your finding it cold
Give me your hand for me to hold

It's feeling cold, no need to shiver
No need to feel cold
We have each other to hold
I wish this night would go on forever

It's the end of the night
But if you dont go
We can dance in the snow
Untill the morning light


My Dreams
Have a sweet little dream
Get away from this world
Laying in my bed
With my hands above my head

There's things i'd like to see
Places i'd like to go
Just shut my eyes
And i can go anywhere

Shut my eyes and drift away
To a nicer place and a better day
To a magical world that is far away

A higher place a little star
I'll fly away and fly off far
With nothing but dreams
And my guitar

I love this world
I love it true
But I could never leave
If I didn't have you

Shut my eyes and drift away
To a nicer place and a better day
To a magical world that is far away


The Moon and Stars
If I was with you
It could last forever
Cos I would never hurt you

I love you all the same
The the stars could sing
They would sing your name

Higher than the tallest tree
Deeper than the deepest sea
Open your eyes and you might see me

The moon and stars are on our side
If we lived on a different planet
Would our hearts collide

My heart is full
Who can I give my love to?
I wish I could give it to you

My love for you is true
The simple fact is
I love you
Tommy Reilly - Shut My Eyes

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Postby Tom92 » Thu Feb 03, 2011 9:15 pm

king_oxymoron wrote:
swiftie13 wrote:
Play wrote:Well, I'm saving them for the Songwriter Idol 2011 :D
:lol: Is there really such thing?
Certainly is!

Songwriter Idol 2010
I wish you wouldn't drag that up, mine were so awful :( :oops:
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Postby swiftie13 » Fri Feb 04, 2011 1:31 am

crazycrazy wrote:Great songs Oasisbobo! :wink:

I've never written a song before but I've written something which I think could be used a simple love pop song! :)

I Love You, it's True

Do you ever think of yourself?
What it is that you want?
Sometimes wants are just as important as your needs.

CHORUS
Keep looking into the ocean waves
It'll all become clear one day
I'm sure you'll be happy
I'm sure you'll be happy

You chameleon you, I've seen what you do
You have the world on a platter
You can go as far as you want to go
Keep twisting & grooving, it's the only way

CHORUS
Keep looking to the blue blue sky
It'll all become clear one day
I'm sure you'll be happy
I'm sure you'll be happy

If only you knew, how my heart thuds for you
I guess I'll just hibernate my love
One day you'll see, love has been here all along living in me.
Looks like we have another professional songwriter here! That's very awesome. I love the ending. :wink:
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Postby swiftie13 » Fri Feb 04, 2011 1:33 am

oasisbobo wrote:I think im gonna love this thread :D :D Here are some more of mine :) Hope you enjoy :)

Dance In The Snow
It's that time of year
When all the roads are clear
It's that time of night
When there's nothing but the moon in sight

The stars light up the sky
Holding on to each other
We're not letting go
We can dance in the snow

It's the end of the night
But if you dont go
We can dance in the snow
Untill the morning light

Lying in the snow looking up at the sky
Holding hands looking up at the stars
If your finding it cold
Give me your hand for me to hold

It's feeling cold, no need to shiver
No need to feel cold
We have each other to hold
I wish this night would go on forever

It's the end of the night
But if you dont go
We can dance in the snow
Untill the morning light


My Dreams
Have a sweet little dream
Get away from this world
Laying in my bed
With my hands above my head

There's things i'd like to see
Places i'd like to go
Just shut my eyes
And i can go anywhere

Shut my eyes and drift away
To a nicer place and a better day
To a magical world that is far away

A higher place a little star
I'll fly away and fly off far
With nothing but dreams
And my guitar

I love this world
I love it true
But I could never leave
If I didn't have you

Shut my eyes and drift away
To a nicer place and a better day
To a magical world that is far away


The Moon and Stars
If I was with you
It could last forever
Cos I would never hurt you

I love you all the same
The the stars could sing
They would sing your name

Higher than the tallest tree
Deeper than the deepest sea
Open your eyes and you might see me

The moon and stars are on our side
If we lived on a different planet
Would our hearts collide

My heart is full
Who can I give my love to?
I wish I could give it to you

My love for you is true
The simple fact is
I love you
You are AMAZING too! I'm glad you love this thread, I was waiting for someone to say that since I started it.
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Postby swiftie13 » Fri Feb 04, 2011 1:49 am

Her is another one of mine. I dedicate it to my friend.

Perfect by (HRJR) That's my initials.

People keep talking
but they haven't said a thing.

People keep walking
but they haven't gone nowhere

You shouldn't take things to heart
Don't let them tear you apart

Just love yourself
'Cause others love you

Chorus:
You're beautiful
Inside and Out
You don't have to change
You are PERFECT
The way you are
You make me laugh
and enjoy each day
I thank God
He sent you my way
So just stay the same
because you are beautiful
Inside and out.

People keep looking
But haven't found a thing

And I've found your friendship
That's enough for me.

Don't shed any tears
Just hear, I have something to say

Chorus:
You're beautiful
Inside and Out
You don't have to change
You are PERFECT
The way you are
You make me laugh
and enjoy each day
I thank God
He sent you my way
So just stay the same
because you are beautiful
Inside and out.

Don't change
Stay the same
Be my "Snich" forever
'Cause I'll always be
There to pick you up when you fall

Chorus:
You're beautiful
Inside and Out
You don't have to change
You are PERFECT
The way you are
You make me laugh
and enjoy each day
I thank God
He sent you my way
So just stay the same
because you are beautiful
Inside and out.


This is probably the best I've written. Snich means best friend in our language. (It's pronounced snish) :D I love my best friend but she thinks she's ugly and not skinny enough. That's why I wrote this for her.
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Postby CrazyCrazy » Fri Feb 04, 2011 1:33 pm

That song of yours is really sweet! :D And thanks it was my first ever song so that was a great compliment! :wink: I'll write some more simple ditties later! :D
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Postby oasisbobo » Fri Feb 04, 2011 6:37 pm

swiftie13 wrote:Perfect
I love it :) Very nice :) and cause its dedicated to your best friend makes it even more special :)
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Postby swiftie13 » Fri Feb 04, 2011 8:27 pm

Thanks guys for the compliments. :D I always try to write about my life and surroundings (just like cough* Taylor Swift cough*) :wink: . It's a good "therapy". :P
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